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Dear Author,On stage they move together beautifully, fluid and flawless and perfectly in sync. Off stage, they dance around each other, hesitant and uncoordinated. What keeps them apart? What steps must they take before they find their rhythm?Photo Description: On a highly polished floor, two supple young men rest. The wall behind them is a deep wine red color, and lightsDear Author,On stage they move together beautifully, fluid and flawless and perfectly in sync. Off stage, they dance around each other, hesitant and uncoordinated. What keeps them apart? What steps must they take before they find their rhythm?Photo Description: On a highly polished floor, two supple young men rest. The wall behind them is a deep wine red color, and lights glow along the edge of the stage so brightly the floor they rest on appears to be mirrored, reflecting their intertwined forms back up at them. Though still, the shape the make together is so dynamic it appears to move. One young man's face is visible and clearly marks him as being of Asian descent, while the other young man's is hidden. They are dressed in white loin cloths, and their skin shimmers with the sweat of their exertions. This story was written as a part of the M/M Romance Group's "Love is Always Write" event. Group members were asked to write a story prompt inspired by a photo of their choice. Authors of the group selected a photo and prompt that spoke to them and wrote a short story.Read the story here or find it in Love Is Always Write: Volume 8....

Title : Shadow Dance
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ISBN : 15719627
Format Type : ebook
Number of Pages : 114 Pages
Status : Available For Download
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Shadow Dance Reviews

  • Sandra
    2019-06-05 22:06

    Offered FREE from the M/M Romance Group, Love Is Always Write: Volume Eight.I feel like this had the potential to be a 5 star story. I was immediately sucked in by Hinata, and intrigued by Peter (although I was put-off at first by the ridiculously over the top hillbilly stereotype). I kind of liked how very spaced out everything was. They saw each other in high school and had huge crushes, but Hinata knew his mother could ruin Peter's family (since his dad worked for them) so he kept his distance, then they go off to college. As much as I don't mind the time going by, I did feel like it started to drag in the middle. So even though I liked the mutual long-standing crush, I felt their connection more at the beginning than I did by the time they finally came together. (view spoiler)[And after being dragged out so long, it was a little weird that Peter just jerked him off, wham-bam-thank-you-sir. Besides the fact that the author was trying to be "subtle", so I had to re-read it to make sure I had understood what was actually happening. (hide spoiler)]At the end the guys were all treating Hinata a wee-bit... not condescending, but like he was a delicate flower to be carried around and cared for and blah blah blah. Especially given the big misunderstanding, I feel they were almost treating him like a child.Speaking of the misunderstanding... Peter's friends mentioned Hinata that first day so clearly they knew him, so did everyone else. I find it hard to believe Peter could really go a year and not figure this out. Besides which, what was keeping Peter from ever talking to Hinata? Like at prom, how could he not ask him to dance?I had a hard time getting a visual of Hinata, and understanding Peter's confusion. (view spoiler)[What did he wear to prom? Does he dress in women's clothing? Or just very effeminate. (hide spoiler)] Was it a reasonable assumption or was Peter just being a big-ol hick who'd never seen an Asian guy with long hair?And lastly, although the picture does show an Asian guy doing a dancy-pose, it didn't quite fit the story. Hinata was dancing alone in the beginning (who knows what style), then he seemed to be proficient in ballroom at the prom. The pic is very contemporary, and even if Hinata did teach Peter how to dance they would never be doing that sort of dancing I don't think. Beside the fact that I'm pretty sure the other person in that pic is a girl (side-boob anyone?) Although I'm OK with the prompt picture just creating a feel and not necessarily a specific scene, it had a different vibe to it, and the actual prompt makes it sound like they're both dancers.I did enjoy this story, but I feel like it could have been cleaned up a little in the middle with more time at the end for Peter and Hinata to build a real connection.["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>["br"]>

  • qx
    2019-06-17 20:02

    My problems with this story:1) Catering to stereotypes,2) Exoticization/Otheri(zi)ng (Japanese/Japanese-Americans),3) Characters' actions didn't make a whole lot of sense,4) Peter's misunderstanding (and the extent of it) was too unbelievable.The first two are problematic enough in themselves, but they also serve to make the story seem poorly researched.

  • Joy
    2019-06-13 20:07

    Wow, this was wretched. Drowning in stereotypes (was Peter's dialect lifted directly from The Beverly Hillbillies? People in Virginia do not talk like that anymore, if they ever did), and the 2 protagonists of this "romance" didn't even MEET until the end of the book? Hello? I appreciate the author making it free, and it was readable, kind of, but that's about it.

  • Cindi
    2019-06-23 00:49

    Hmm... where to start? First, I will say that I live in the deep south... born and raised. Second, I will say that the only way you would ever hear a person down here speak the way that Peter did in this story is if they are pulling your leg.... or.... if they are getting paid to look like a hick in a reality show (betcha know which one I'm referring to). Seriously. Sure, we've been known to do that when certain folks make some stupid, stereotypical southern comment. We do it to play into it. Do we really talk like that? Hell no. I've lived in the south for 45 years and have never, EVER known of anyone to talk like this (even in the backwoods). It was horrible. The goofy sayings. It doesn't happen. Again, it's not real. I have always had an issue with southern-speak in books but I can honestly say that I have never read anything like this one before. It's like you need a redneck interpreter in order to know what the hell Peter and his cousins are saying. And I live in the south!Here's what bugs me the most...... the story could have been good. I fell in love with Hinata right off. He's the child of a very traditional, overbearing Japanese woman. This woman pushes him to the point of him being willing to be ousted from the family later just so he can have a semblance of a normal life. I would have liked Peter had his dialogue and vocabulary not been ridiculous. The story has a slow build-up. I liked all of that. I actually liked all of the story with the exception of what I have already ranted about. I love opposites attract stories. Peter and Hinata are definite opposites. They see each other one time in high school and there is an instant connection that neither is able to act on. The rest of the story spans over a period of a couple of years until they finally meet again. While I felt that that meeting was a tad rushed, I did still enjoy it. But I can't get past feeling like I was reading an m/m version of Beverly Hillbillies.I know this was a free story and I appreciate the author taking the time to write it and for including it with the others. I could have just marked this as read and been done with it. But I couldn't let this one go. Had Hinata's story been written a little differently, I would have seriously thought the entire story was meant to be a joke.

  • Julesmarie
    2019-06-11 22:47

    My issues with this were similar to those of other reviewers: the dialect, the stereotypes or "otherization" (love that word!), and the extent of the misunderstanding.My issue with the dialect was rather the opposite of some reviewers, however. It wasn't the fact that it was present that disturbed me, it was the fact that it seemed unfinished. It seems to me that if you're going to do dialect, you need to do it wholeheartedly. I can't think of anyone who would say "'em" who would also say "making." (In fact, I can't think of many people who actually pronounce the "g" in most -ing endings...) so, if you're changing "them" to "'em" why would you not change "making" to "makin'"?The Japanese stereotypes were the ones that bothered me more than the hillbilly ones, but even with that I could still have enjoyed the story--if the story were at all plausible.The fact that the "misunderstanding" lasted as long as it did went way past suspension of disbelief and into ridiculous. (view spoiler)[Peter's friends even right from the beginning refer to Hinata as "the beautiful Japanese boy," so it makes NO sense that one of them wouldn't have told him that the "girl" he's crushing on is male. And there's no way he wouldn't have told those redheaded girls (I forgot their names) about his crush, since he apparently told every single other character in the book.Finally, it seems to me that crowning a boy prom queen would stir up at least a little bit of controversy, or at the very least draw at least a little bit of attention. Unless I was to infer that there was both controversy and attention and Peter is too much of an oblivious hillbilly to notice? (hide spoiler)]Bonus star for being free.

  • Katy Beth Mckee
    2019-05-29 20:03

    I guess the very things that many reviews found difficult I found endearing. I think it celebrates what makes us different and lets us have fun with misunderstandings. I like the possibility of love and each still figuring each other out. I also like not just the two main characters but the complete supporting cast as well. Everyone is a big and larger then life but was a part of this book's charm. I look forward to reading more. Thanks Cherie for your contribution.

  • Cherie Noel
    2019-05-29 02:14

    I loved writing this. I had already written one for the LiAW event, and truly had no intention of picking up another, and even less time to do so... but when I saw that the author who had picked up Samantha's story had to bow out, I decided to make time to write another. I'm so glad I did. I fell in love with these characters, and the story they were telling me. Thanks again, Sam... I'd never have met Hinata and Peter if not for you!

  • Aniko
    2019-06-08 00:08

    I couldn't finish it. Peter's over the top dialect made it unreadable for me. Especially because it was not only present in the dialogue, but also in the narration.

  • Laura
    2019-06-04 19:57

    I hope we get the rest of their story!!

  • Bookbee
    2019-06-21 20:49

    3.5 StarsThere was much to like about this story, interesting characters being at the top of the list. I did have a little trouble with my "suspension of disbelief" for the misunderstanding continuing for such a long time. And if I could make wishes come true I would wish that the 2 MCs did actually dance with each other as portrayed in that most beautiful photo prompt.

  • Shelley
    2019-05-29 23:02

    Love the contrast between Hinata and Peter. Butterfly. Too cute.'You thought I was a girl.''I surely did.''I am not a girl.''I reckon not.''Does that matter?'...'I reckon it doesn't matter to me one bit that you ain't a girl. Except it makes some things a darn site easier to figure out, as I'm right familiar with the equipment.'

  • Lily
    2019-06-10 03:50

    I really liked the character of Hinata but Peter comes off as a hillbilly caricature. I did like the slow pace of the story but felt there wasn't enough at the end to make their relationship believable. There was potential for a good story here but it just didn't work for me personally.

  • Victoria
    2019-06-14 03:13

    3.5 - Sweet story. I would love to read more about these two. Thank you Cherie Noel, for donating your story, time and talent.

  • GlamLawyer
    2019-05-30 02:51

    Couldn't get into the story at all. I won't rate it because of that. Might try to read it at some point again.

  • Тамрико
    2019-06-15 01:56

    Since I finished a little more than 75% of the book I think I am entitled to rate it. The reasons for one star rating are already mentioned in other reviews. I don't want to be redundant.

  • Kathleen
    2019-06-08 00:53

    2.5 stars

  • DeWanda
    2019-06-04 01:14

    Awesome can't wait for more!

  • Kylie
    2019-06-04 21:51

    Sweet short story

  • Tamara (緑)
    2019-06-09 01:49

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  • Helen Peter
    2019-06-23 03:47

    Wonderfully sweet story.