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Edmund and Mack have been friends for years. Edmund has been in love with Mack for almost as long. Things finally seem to be shifting between the two until Edmund ruins everything for the sake of petty infighting with his family. Can Edmund prove to Mack that he is more important than all of that or will he loose Mack forever?This story was written as a part of the M/M RomEdmund and Mack have been friends for years. Edmund has been in love with Mack for almost as long. Things finally seem to be shifting between the two until Edmund ruins everything for the sake of petty infighting with his family. Can Edmund prove to Mack that he is more important than all of that or will he loose Mack forever?This story was written as a part of the M/M Romance Group's "Love Has No Boundaries" event. Group members were asked to write a story prompt inspired by a photo of their choice. Authors of the group selected a photo and prompt that spoke to them and wrote a short story....

Title : Pickup Lines
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ISBN : 18245895
Format Type : ebook
Number of Pages : 21 Pages
Status : Available For Download
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Pickup Lines Reviews

  • Exina
    2019-02-02 19:09

    Why do authors tend to squeeze into so many things into a short story? It easily could have been the plot of a full-length novel. Two stars but only because of the hot redhead in kilt.

  • SheReadsALot
    2019-02-13 21:51

    3.5 Stars--I usually bypass no sex stories. I like to read a little diddling, no matter how mild. Because that's the kind of girl I am, I am.But I was pleasantly surprised with this story. It was cute yet not saccharine times a million. And the corny pickup lines made me roll my eyes happily. Edmund and Mack made this friends to lovers, opposites attract short story work. Plus, Mack is one hot ginger who can rock a kilt.Yum.

  • Ami
    2019-02-13 16:06

    3.5 starsA sweet best friends-to-lovers story. I loved the set-up, that they both came from different background. I loved that Mack was endearing, despite his 'bear' look. There were some cheesy pick-up lines (meant to use as humor) which was perfect since I just read a Merlin/Arthur fanfic with similar rubbish pick-up lines that was as hilarious. Some scenes were moving in fast-forward (like suddenly it was four years later or six weeks later). One of the best things about this short story -- the mother was NOT becoming a villain. It was lovely to read about that part.

  • Nina
    2019-02-13 19:06

    Can you say "rushed and superficial"? I mean, it's cute, but... eh. KH, I've come to expect much more from you.The story is very nice and the family dynamics would be interesting to explore, but I just got dragged by the hand through the story in half the time it should have taken, thus not getting the chance to actually understand why the characters were being such asshats. (So help me, Edmund.)Still, this author is so good at the details. "The End" at, well, the end was replaced by "The Beginning". Cheesy? Oh, yeah. Cute and romantic? Yup. I'm a bit of a sap, I've found recently.

  • Elizabetta
    2019-01-27 23:18

    3.5 starsThe play on various pick up lines used throughout the story is fun. It’s a little hard to believe that Edmund would wait 4 years to put the moves on Mack but oh well, to each their own. This was as much about overcoming snobbery and seeing beneath the veneer as it was a love story. Those who like their romances sweet, with no sex will enjoy this one too.

  • Meep
    2019-02-04 17:12

    A cute little story of two men from very different backgrounds.I loved Mack, a big kilt-wearing softie, very likeable. Edmund the narrator, I was less keen on which kept me from loving the book.There are time jumps, it moves suddenly to four years later and I don't know that that was necessary. In fact considering the humour of the book is constant pick-up lines, it made me wonder why in four whole years when one said 'Are you picking me up?' the other never said 'YES' it would have been a shorter story but I might have liked Edmund more.The 'misunderstanding' is Edmund acting petty and immature, the scene irritated me, though it does bring about a really nice bonding moment between him and his mother. Wonderful to see a mother who is flawed but loving and not a cliche bitch/fangirl. Well worth a read for that moment alone. And Mack, I liked Mack.

  • Samantha
    2019-02-08 16:51

    This was another okay read. Certainly not bad and very cute in some areas.I think my biggest problem, and where I had a disconnect with this, was that I really just didn't like Edmund. He really got on my nerves and while I adored Mack and his outgoing nature and the way he was so confident, even to the point of wearing an awesome kilt to a black-tie affair, I just couldn't get past not liking Edmund.Certainly worth giving a shot, though.

  • Pjm12
    2019-02-12 17:51

    Cute and funny and sweet. I am giving it an extra star for the library (fine) joke.

  • Didi
    2019-02-04 15:03

    Awww, such a cute best-friends turned to couple story; more so since it's the case of classic high-born fell for his bear of a best friend. I'd be happier to know more of Mack's thoughts which I don't get since it's told from Edmund's perspective; and what the heck happened between Edmund and his parents to make such bad air between them (talk about miss-communication and misunderstanding!). Right at the last few paragraph there seemed to be son/mother re-connection which I wish could be dig in a bit.What I love is that the author put THE BEGINNING at the end of the story. It's a resounding note on where Edmund/Mack's relationship was. :D

  • mw138
    2019-02-05 17:17

    Very sweet friends to lovers story that brought a smile to my face. I liked that the MCs were opposites and came from different worlds, yet developed a great friendship...and eventually deeper feelings.

  • Lauren
    2019-01-23 16:17

    I loved this short story, it was so adorable! I was pretty annoyed with Edmund for a while - poor Mack! But I'm really glad things worked out in the end, and what a wonderful ending too! Or should I say beginning? ;) Great job, Kathleen. What a wonderful free read.

  • Kinga
    2019-02-01 21:53

    Sweet cheesy funny and lovely! ( And ginger man in kilts.) I loved how it ended with the 'The Beginning', so fitting !

  • Sunny
    2019-01-28 19:58

    Sweet couple, cute story :)

  • Eli Easton
    2019-01-26 17:52

    A cute short read. I liked the characters and the pick-up lines. And oh, the kilt! It ended just as it was getting good. ;-)

  • Jilrene ♥
    2019-01-25 22:59

    A short story that covers several years. Loved it!

  • Lucy
    2019-02-06 20:10

    Short and adorable. I want to see him in he kilt!

  • jenTed
    2019-02-17 21:15

    This was a super cute short story. Loved the cheese pick up lines and the kilt!

  • Julesmarie
    2019-02-20 14:58

    Very, very sweet friends-to-lovers story. I also enjoyed the opposites-attract theme that was happening here, as well.(view spoiler)[I think my favorite thing was that Edmund recognized that he needed to work on rebuilding their friendship first before trying to make anything new out of it.It was lovely how he made things up to Mack after that disastrous charity benefit date.Also lovely was how apparent it was that Mack wanted more than friendship too. The way his expression changes when Edmund announces he's got a date at the end was sweet. (hide spoiler)]I'm also very impressed with how much I came to care about these characters, especially for such a short story.3.5 stars, rounded up for being free.

  • Maria
    2019-01-25 19:08

    3.5 cute and sexy starsCute little story about friends becoming lovers despite some stupid mistakes. A nice "oppposites-attract"-theme going on there, too. All around sweet and easy, with a little bit of hurt and angst on the side. But, hello! Yummy guy with a big heart - in a KILT. What's not to like about it? I was pleasently surprised by this story, especially because I despise corny pick-up lines, but with Edmund and Mack I was laughing a lot, in stead of getting annoyed. They just made it work!The ending was fine, too. No sex, no smut - but it fit the bill perfectly. Smiles all around.

  • Katy Beth Mckee
    2019-01-21 22:16

    Edmund likes Mack and on impulse asks him out. Then he proceeds to blow it completely and terrible with his overriding need to upset and embarrass his parents. He lets his family drama really hurt Mack and not only ruin his chance at a relationship but kill a friendship at the same time. The surprise in the story is Edmund's mom who turns out to have some insight and takes responsibility for her own roll in the ongoing family drama. But there is a lot to overcome now if these two have a chance at a happily ever after.

  • Melanie~~
    2019-02-18 21:51

    I loved that the dapper, "well-put-together" man was crushing on the burlier, "non-conventionally-attractive" man. I agree with another review who had issues with some of Edmund's behaviors. Still like them as a couple once he's able to pull his head out of his ass. ;-)[NOTE: I rate most writing event stories (free reads) 4 or 5 stars because of my appreciation of the author's participation.]

  • Tamara (緑)
    2019-01-22 17:55

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  • Silkeeeeee
    2019-02-06 23:15

    Cute as hell. Fun pickup lines. A little too quick, a little bit void of much emotion, a little shallow.

  • Marlobo
    2019-02-14 22:12

    3,5 stars. A light and sweet hors d'oeuvre.

  • Kimberly
    2019-02-20 16:11

    Super sweet!

  • Heather
    2019-01-20 21:15

    Friends to lovers.

  • Victoria
    2019-01-31 16:03

    3.5 - I enjoyed this sweet friends to lovers story. Nice interpretation of the photo and the story letter. Thank you Kathleen Hayes for donating your story, your time and your talent.

  • Monique
    2019-02-20 23:05

    This was a very sweet friends to lovers story. I enjoyed the mother's character, the touch of angst and the cute scenes between the MC's.

  • Rachel Emily
    2019-02-12 22:53

    Awwwww, I just loved this! I have a stupid grin on my face and I could not stop laughing at all the bad pick up lines. Such a sweet story, thank you so much!

  • Carey
    2019-02-17 15:03